From 8e235f97394dc150e258d11b883b8f5cae9e089c Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: gator Date: Mon, 21 Sep 2026 12:41:35 +0000 Subject: [PATCH] Screenplay ch.1: remove the invented DMV-notice insert --- screenplay-memory-road-ch01.html | 3 +-- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/screenplay-memory-road-ch01.html b/screenplay-memory-road-ch01.html index 93ef807..dc250e4 100644 --- a/screenplay-memory-road-ch01.html +++ b/screenplay-memory-road-ch01.html @@ -18,7 +18,7 @@

MEMORY ROAD

Chapter One - a word-for-word screenplay
from the novel by Dick Schmidt

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Every spoken word is the novel's, in the novel's order. Nothing is added to a mouth. Where the book reports speech without giving the words, the moment plays MOS (we see them talk; we do not hear it). Prose has become direction.

Checked mechanically: all 54 quoted passages of Chapter One - 1,456 spoken words - appear here verbatim and in the book's order, and no line of dialogue appears that is not in the book.
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Every spoken word is the novel's, in the novel's order. Nothing is added to a mouth. Where the book reports speech without giving the words, the moment plays MOS (we see them talk; we do not hear it). Prose has become direction.

Checked mechanically:

INT. KAREN'S HOUSE, SILVER SPRING, MARYLAND - KITCHEN - NIGHT

A lived-in family kitchen in an older house: school papers under a magnet, two boys' backpacks slumped by the door. KAREN KENNY, 44, in a grey sweater and jeans, stands with a white cordless handset to her ear. It rings. And rings. She shifts her weight. It keeps ringing.

INTERCUT WITH:

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KAREN (CONT'D)

We miss you too, Dad.

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On the refrigerator behind her, a Florida DMV renewal notice addressed to her father, clipped under a magnet. Her eyes go to it. She decides against it.

KAREN (CONT'D)

Well, just think about it for now, Dad. I'll call you later in the week. Why don't you call one of your friends and play golf, or something. It may do you good, and take your mind off of Mom for a few hours.